• Re: Apple Montage / Will Dockery (Instagram poem #6)

    From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 23:01:15 2026
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    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:

    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted: will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    [snip]

    Of course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    A montage comprises two or more *images

    My poem is filled with images, forming montage.

    Your poem is made up of complete sentences -- not images.




    The sentences *contain* the images.

    Sentences contain images.

    Film scenes contain shots.

    A film montage is made up of shots; not scenes.

    A literary montage is made up of images; not sentences that contain images.

    As per usual, you're trying to bend and stretch rules and definitions to make them correspond to your misunderstood versions of them.

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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 23:15:28 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted: will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    [snip]

    Of course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    A montage comprises two or more *images

    My poem is filled with images, forming montage.

    Your poem is made up of complete sentences -- not images.

    The sentences *contain* the images.

    Sentences contain images.

    That's correct.
    --
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    https://www.reverbnation.com/willdockery
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  • From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 23:18:20 2026
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    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    [snip]



    If course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery



    These *images* are presented as sentence fragments -- not complete sentences, and certainly not scenes.




    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.

    Yes, Donkey, there are.

    There are hard and fast rules about all forms of poetry, including "montage."

    Just because you're unfamiliar with them, doesn't mean that they don't exist.

    Here's George Dance's "trusted source" and only friend on how to write a montage poem:

    Steps to Write a Montage Poem

    Define the Theme or Purpose: Decide what the montage aims to convey.
    Is it a relationship falling in love, the passage of a summer, or a character's internal change?

    Brainstorm "Bricks" (Imagery): List specific, sensory, and original images.
    Do not worry about a linear story.
    Focus on snapshot momentsrCoa bruised knee, the smell of rain, a specific quote, a broken watch.

    Establish a Fast Pace: Arrange the imagery to move quickly.
    Each image should be a "glimpse" or a "short shot" that doesn't linger too long.

    Use Juxtaposition: Place contrasting images next to each other to create new meanings,
    such as placing a quiet, intimate moment immediately after a chaotic one.

    Utilize Section Dividers: Separate your vignettes or images with line breaks, stanzas,
    or even symbols (like squiggles or asterisks) to indicate a jump in time or location.

    Conclude with Impact: The final image should tie the previous, disparate scenes together,
    providing a sense of completion or a "secret message" that the images together suggest.


    NOTE: "Establish a Fast Pace" means that you are not working with scenes, or even complete sentences.
    Most montage poems combine several fragments together to create complete, multi-part sentences.

    AUTUMN MONTAGE uses 1-3 sentence fragments per line, all of which create a single, run-on sentence:

    Football and falling leaves, red, gold, and brown
    Patchwork quilts, blankets of soft eiderdown,
    Back-to-school hobgoblins, apples in tow
    Crooked-faced porch pumpkins all in a row,
    Bedknobs and broomsticks, and Halloween spells
    Horses and hayrides, and pumpkin-spice smells,
    Scarecrows and cornstalks, and fresh sheaves of wheat
    Bedsheet ghosts, witches who cry "Trick or treat!"
    Harvest moon dances, an applebobbed kiss,
    Masquerade glances that whisper of bliss,
    Mischief night madness, soap, t.p., and eggs
    Woolly bears, crickets and daddy longlegs,
    Barleycorn, Johnny cakes, wide upturned eyes
    Chasing the wild geese south cross the skies,
    Cardamom, cinnamon, ginger, and clove
    Eye of newt, fenny snake, cast iron stove
    Hearthfires, candlesticks, flames burning bright,
    Black cats and things that go "Bump!" in the night,
    Jacks Frost and Skellington, ghost lights and ghouls
    Harvest Homes, Harvest Queens, courtiers and fools,
    Samhain, All Hallows Eve, Day of the Dead
    Ghostly night horseman in search of his head,
    Veteran's Day marches, the season's first snow
    Thanksgiving turkeys, the fireside glow,
    Eggnog and pumpkin pie, warm Winter wine
    Wreaths made of Indian corn, holly and pine,
    Gloves and galoshes, the North Wind doth blow
    Carrying Autumn off -- where, I don't know.

    And it does so in a rhymed/metered format.

    Apart from not having section dividers (or sections), AUTUMN MONTAGE adheres to all of the established rules.

    APPLE MONTAGE, otoh, does not.

    You can title your poem "Apple Montage," but it's only going to leave readers scratching their heads. The title doesn't fit with the actual poem.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 19:21:13 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:

    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    [snip]

    Of course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    A montage comprises two or more *images*

    My poem is filled with images, forming montage.

    The sentences *contain* the images.



    Sentences contain images.




    That's how I created the montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 19:32:45 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    [snip]



    If course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery



    These *images* are presented as sentence fragments -- not complete sentences, and certainly not scenes.




    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.


    There are hard and fast rules about all forms of poetry, including "montage



    You haven't provided any textbook examples.

    Post a link from a poetry textbook that gives specific rules to writing a montage in poetry form.

    That's right, you can't.

    HTH and HAND.


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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 00:37:45 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:
    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    [snip]

    Of course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    These *images* are presented as sentence fragments -- not complete sentences, and certainly not scenes.

    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.

    Yes, there are.

    In what textbook?

    Can you provide a link?

    I didn't think so.
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    https://www.reverbnation.com/willdockery
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  • From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 02:17:23 2026
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    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    [snip]



    If course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery



    These *images* are presented as sentence fragments -- not complete sentences, and certainly not scenes.




    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.


    There are hard and fast rules about all forms of poetry, including "montage



    You haven't provided any textbook examples.

    Post a link from a poetry textbook that gives specific rules to writing a montage in poetry form.

    That's right, you can't.

    I already posted a link to an in-depth essay on Montage Poetry.

    Ever the Donkey, you didn't bother to read it.
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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sun May 10 22:27:25 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    [snip]



    If course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery



    These *images* are presented as sentence fragments -- not complete sentences, and certainly not scenes.




    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.


    There are hard and fast rules about all forms of poetry, including "montage >>


    You haven't provided any textbook examples.

    Post a link from a poetry textbook that gives specific rules to writing a montage in poetry form.

    That's right, you can't.



    I already posted a link to an in-depth essay on Montage Poetry.




    I didn't see a link, but I'll look again.


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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 07:06:03 2026
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    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    smoking menthol

    Image ^^^

    beyond the sheds.

    Image ^^^

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    Image ^^^

    To the right
    behind the barn

    Image ^^^

    were apple trees.

    Image ^^^

    There were several
    of those trees

    Image ^^^

    and other trees
    behind them

    Image ^^^

    beyond a field

    Image ^^^

    and behind them, other trees.

    Image ^^^

    And so on.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery
    --
    Poetry and songs of Will Dockery:
    https://www.reverbnation.com/willdockery
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  • From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 19:52:23 2026
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    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:


    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.


    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.


    smoking menthol

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.



    beyond the sheds.

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's a location.


    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's a location.

    To the right
    behind the barn

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's a location.

    were apple trees.

    Image ^^^

    Hooray! An image!

    Give up, Donkey.

    It's not a montage, and will never be one.

    Dumbass.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 20:02:08 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    [...]

    To the right
    behind the barn

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's a location.

    You're wrong.

    Picture a barn.

    Presto, an image.

    HTH and HAND.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 20:07:16 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 20:15:00 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    beyond the sheds.

    Image ^^^

    Stop lying, when you read that bit you get an image of several sheds.

    Admit it.

    EfyA
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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 16:23:09 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:

    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.




    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.


    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.




    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    See JLA Forums attachment below for a photograph of Jenny (2nd from the left) to add to the context of the image.

    HTH and HAND.


    View the attachments for this post at: http://www.jlaforums.com/viewtopic.php?p=704955743#704955743




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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 16:35:04 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:



    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage







    It's not a montage



    Yes, it's a poem written in montage form:

    [Original text restored]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

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  • From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 22:40:52 2026
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    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:


    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.

    But you don't describe her, Donkey.

    You don't say how old she is, how tall she is, whether she's thin or fat, what color her hair and eyes are, or what she's wearing.

    All you do is name her.

    You may have an image of your cousin in your head, but your readers have never laid eyes on her.

    Anyway, your poem is still in sentence form.

    A literary montage (as detailed by Dunce's trusted source and only friend) is made up of short sentences, or independent fragments.

    Apple orchard, rustic barn
    Cousin Jenny sneakin' smokes,

    is written in montage form: three separate images that can be seen as parts of a larger picture.

    Read the article I sent the link for and learn what a montage is before you make an even bigger fool of yourself.

    Dumbass.
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  • From Cujo DeSockpuppet@cujo@petitmorte.net to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Mon May 11 22:44:56 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> wrote in news:1778539252-17124@newsgrouper.org:


    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:


    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of
    images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't
    invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.

    But you don't describe her, Donkey.

    You don't say how old she is, how tall she is, whether she's thin or
    fat, what color her hair and eyes are, or what she's wearing.

    All you do is name her.

    You may have an image of your cousin in your head, but your readers
    have never laid eyes on her.

    Anyway, your poem is still in sentence form.

    A literary montage (as detailed by Dunce's trusted source and only
    friend) is made up of short sentences, or independent fragments.

    Apple orchard, rustic barn
    Cousin Jenny sneakin' smokes,

    is written in montage form: three separate images that can be seen as
    parts of a larger picture.

    Read the article I sent the link for and learn what a montage is
    before you make an even bigger fool of yourself.

    There will never be a bottom to the depths of his idiocy.

    Dumbass.

    Dumbass!1!
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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 00:04:46 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:



    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.



    But you don't describe her



    It's a montage, there's no space for descriptions, just flashing images.

    HTH and HAND.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 00:11:39 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:



    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.




    But you don't describe her

    Apple orchard, rustic barn
    Cousin Jenny sneakin' smokes,




    Where's the description of Jenny you scolded me about neglecting?

    HTH and HAND.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 00:13:54 2026
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    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:


    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    [snip]



    If course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    There's no established rules on how montage in poetry form has to be presented.

    You haven't provided any textbook examples.

    Post a link from a poetry textbook that gives specific rules to writing a montage in poetry form.

    That's right, you can't.



    I already posted a link to an in-depth essay on Montage Poetry.




    Okay, I'll scroll back and look for that.


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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 04:22:26 2026
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    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    smoking menthol

    Image ^^^

    beyond the sheds.

    Image ^^^

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    Image ^^^

    To the right
    behind the barn

    Image ^^^

    were apple trees.

    Image ^^^

    There were several
    of those trees

    Image ^^^

    and other trees
    behind them

    Image ^^^

    beyond a field

    Image ^^^

    and behind them, other trees.

    Image ^^^

    And so on:

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd

    Image ^^^

    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;

    Image ^^^

    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    Image ^^^

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    Image ^^^

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,

    Image ^^^

    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    Image ^^^

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    And so it goes, a montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 04:27:59 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    Apple orchard, rustic barn
    Cousin Jenny sneakin' smokes,

    This doesn't really tell my story, though.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 04:42:51 2026
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    Cujo DeSockpuppet <cujo@petitmorte.net> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of
    images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't
    invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    HTH and HAND.

    There will never be a bottom to the depths

    Of your obsessive trolling?

    We know.

    EfyA
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 11:51:12 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    [snip]

    Of course my poem was obviously a montage in poetry form, as the title stated from the get go.

    [Original text restored, troll content removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    A montage comprises two or more *images

    My poem is filled with images, forming montage.

    Your poem is made up of complete sentences -- not images.

    The sentences *contain* the images.

    A film montage is made up of shots; not scenes.

    This is poetry, not a movie.

    HTH and HAND.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue May 12 12:13:34 2026
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    General Zod <zodthemighty2@gmail.com> posted:
    Will Dockery wrote:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery


    Good choice Doc..........

    Thanks again,band great to visit with you last night.

    Your new artwork is looking superb.

    EfyA
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  • From michaelmaleficapendragon@michaelmaleficapendragon@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (HarryLime) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Wed May 13 18:37:53 2026
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    Will-Dockery wrote:

    Michael Pendragon wrote:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:



    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. It's an action.

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    Wrong. She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.



    But you don't describe her


    It's a montage, there's no space for descriptions, just flashing images.

    HTH and HAND.




    You are dumber than dumb, Donkey.

    A name is not an image.

    A sentence is not a flashing image -- or even a series of flashing images.

    An image (in a montage) is not part of a sentence.

    It begins and ends with itself:

    "A red truck" is an image. "Children running" is an image. "A country road" is an image.
    "As I turned onto a country road, I saw some children running after a red truck" is not an image.

    Images in montage cannot be juxtaposed if they are part of the same sentence.

    Dumbass.


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  • From michaelmaleficapendragon@michaelmaleficapendragon@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (HarryLime) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Wed May 13 18:43:27 2026
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    [quote="Will Dockery"]Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:

    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:
    Michael Pendragon <user17124> posted:
    Will Dockery <user3274> posted:

    The poem is montage in poetry form, made up of a series of images:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around

    Image ^^^

    The menthol cigarette is visible.

    An image.

    with Cousin Jenny,

    Image ^^^

    She's a character.

    That's true, but the description of her is an image.

    She's not invisible, I'm not invisible, the menthol cigarette isn't invisible, the barn behind us isn't invisible.

    Several images right there.

    Part of the montage in poetry form.

    Apple orchard, rustic barn
    Cousin Jenny sneakin' smokes,




    This doesn't really tell my story, though.

    --
    That's because they're images, dumbass.

    Your poem tells a story.

    A poem that tells a story is called a "Narrative Poem" -- not a "Montage Poem."

    Your poem is a Narrative Poem. It tells a story.

    "Autumn Montage" is a "Montage Poem" because it juxtaposes separate (non-linearly connected) images to create a concept.

    Calling your poem "Apple Montage" is just as incorrect (and just as stupid) as me calling my poem "Autumn Narrative."

    Words matter. So do the definitions of different poetry forms.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Thu May 14 00:18:06 2026
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    HarryLime wrote:
    [snip]



    Again, "Apple Montage" is a montage in poetry form.

    All your whining can't change that fact, Harry.

    [Original text restored, troll rubbish removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Thu May 14 06:16:45 2026
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    General Zod wrote:
    It is truly a montage in poetry form...



    You nailed it.

    Great to see you and the other artists the other night, Zod.

    See JLA Forums attachment below.


    View the attachments for this post at: http://www.jlaforums.com/viewtopic.php?p=705058787#705058787




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  • From Michael Pendragon@user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Thu May 14 12:48:04 2026
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    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:

    HarryLime wrote:
    [snip]



    Again, "Apple Montage" is a montage in poetry form.

    All your whining can't change that fact, Harry.

    [Original text restored, troll rubbish removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery


    It's two scenes and a transitional bridge, Donkey.

    Just calling it like it is.

    Deal with it.
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Thu May 14 12:51:31 2026
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    Michael Pendragon <user17124@newsgrouper.org.invalid> posted:
    will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) posted:
    HarryLime wrote:

    [snip]

    Again, "Apple Montage" is a montage in poetry form.

    All your whining can't change that fact, Harry.

    [Original text restored, troll rubbish removed.]

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery


    It's two scenes and a transitional bridge

    Thanks again for reading and commenting.
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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Fri May 15 22:01:46 2026
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    Anonymous wrote:
    Will Dockery wrote:

    mydemon...@gmail.com wrote:
    Will Dockery wrote:

    Apple Montage

    Sneaking around
    with Cousin Jenny,
    smoking menthol
    beyond the sheds.

    Late summer vacation 1973
    in the backwoods of Tennessee.

    To the right
    behind the barn
    were apple trees.

    There were several
    of those trees
    and other trees
    behind them
    beyond a field
    and behind them, other trees.

    Later, I stood near
    as a crowd
    watched Pops and my Uncle
    cooking apple butter;
    stirring the brown gunk,
    boiling in a huge black kettle.

    I saw my father
    secretly pass
    a wine bottle
    to my Uncle Clarence.

    I went from
    breathing cold mist
    out back behind the barn,
    to breathing
    the hot misty steam.

    The air smelled of apple fumes
    and strong booze.

    -Will Dockery

    michaelmalef...@gmail.com wrote:

    A montage is neither a setting nor a backdrop

    Go ahead and write your own version of a montage in poetry, I already have mine, love it or hate it, and with the previous thread up to nearly 800 posts, time to break it and start a new thread for "Apple Montage".

    Apple Montage, coming soon to Instagram:

    https://www.instagram.com/willdockery007/?hl=en

    It is truly a montage in poetry form...

    http://www.fusion-journal.com/issue/004-fusion-the-town-and-the-city/fourw-a-regional-press/

    "Perhaps we need a word for montage in poetry since pastiche is different in kind, pastiche being a collage where there is no evident order structuring it; in this context, we might call such a thing non-generic collage.. Instead, GlastonburyrCOs poem is a montage of its own being thought, a montage of the experience of thinking a poem into being at a moment..."


    So you've googled another example of someone using the term "montage" in relation to poetry... yeah, and?

    No one is arguing that poetic montage doesn't exist (I've provided you with examples from my own poetry).

    I'm unfamiliar with Glastonbury's poem (as, I strongly suspect, are you)

    No, I've read Glastonbury's poem, as well as the poem it references, is an homage to, Frank O'Hara's poem, as well as the Lou Reed lyric it also references/pays homage to.

    . Glastonbury's poem may or may not turn out to be an example of poetic montage. However, you are not Keri Glastonbury, and "Apple Montage" is not "Sally Can't Dance."

    Just because Glastonbury and Pendragon have written montage poems

    Or so you say you have, as I have used montage in poetry form in my "Apple Montage" poem.

    It really is just that simple, I have explained that my poem uses my montage effects in poetry form, and so it does.

    Either accept that, or don't... and we can argue for the rest of our lives over this if you really want to.




    You can argue till you're blue in the face



    I probably will.

    Thanks again for reading and commenting, "Anonymous."

    EfyA


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