• Re: Earth Star//tdc/draft

    From mummycullen@mummycullen@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (MummyChunk) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue Mar 3 17:30:14 2026
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    Dai Crowther wrote:
    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.



    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?


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  • From mpsilvertone@mpsilvertone@yahoo-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (HarryLime) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue Mar 3 17:47:20 2026
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    MummyChunk wrote:

    Dai Crowther wrote:
    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.


    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?



    It is finished. Notice how the final two words repeat (with a slight alteration) the title.

    Poetically, it better than Will Donkey's unspeakable shit, but that's not saying much.


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  • From will.dockery@will.dockery@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (Will-Dockery) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue Mar 3 18:14:43 2026
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    HarryLime wrote:

    MummyChunk wrote:

    Dai Crowther wrote:
    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.


    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?


    It is finished. Notice how the final two words repeat (with a slight alteration) the title.

    Poetically, it better than



    Childish name-calling from Harry Lime noted and removed

    HTH and HAND.


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  • From mpsilvertone@mpsilvertone@yahoo-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (HarryLime) to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Tue Mar 3 19:02:58 2026
    From Newsgroup: alt.arts.poetry.comments

    Will-Dockery wrote:

    HarryLime wrote:

    MummyChunk wrote:

    Dai Crowther wrote:
    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.


    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?


    It is finished. Notice how the final two words repeat (with a slight alteration) the title.

    Poetically, it better than


    Childish name-calling from Harry Lime noted and removed

    HTH and HAND.



    Touchy today, Donkey?

    Oh... I'm sorry. Had you convinced yourself that you were a better poet than Tommy Tosser?


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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Wed Mar 4 04:24:13 2026
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    mummycullen@gmail-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (MummyChunk) posted:
    Dai Crowther wrote:

    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.

    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?

    This is a response to the post seen at: http://www.jlaforums.com/viewtopic.php?p=658537765#658537765

    Interesting find, MummyChunk.
    --
    Poetry and songs of Will Dockery:
    https://www.reverbnation.com/willdockery
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  • From Will Dockery@user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid to alt.arts.poetry.comments on Wed Mar 4 04:35:42 2026
    From Newsgroup: alt.arts.poetry.comments


    mpsilvertone@yahoo-dot-com.no-spam.invalid (HarryLime) posted:
    Will Dockery wrote:
    HarryLime wrote:
    MummyChunk wrote:
    Dai Crowther wrote:

    Earth Star

    Son, you arrive home safe
    from dazzling activity,
    inspired by the dilettante dangers
    of a summers day
    but look at you,
    scarred by dirt, fragranced
    by meadow grass
    and wood mulch,
    suffering to be preened
    of thorn and leaf
    as you chatter and gabble
    like a stirred goose.

    Your face is a theatre,
    with arms stretched like wings,
    flying through the acts
    and scenes of your day.
    Woodsman, hunter,
    Robin Hood and Marco Polo,
    revealing the truths of dens
    and hideaway hollows,
    convinced that each
    has been enlightened
    by your footfall,
    to be mapped and plotted
    for posterity
    as your discovery.

    You did not see me
    observing you at play.
    Across the river
    in dog-walk reverie
    I only stepped
    into the shadows
    of secretive shrubbery
    that you might be free,
    unencumbered
    by the inelegance
    of acknowledgment.

    I was mindful and fretful
    as you clambered branch and bough,
    knowing that tree shadows,
    though soft, would fail
    to break your fall.

    And fall you did
    but you were saved
    by sprung moss,
    young bones
    and the medicinal
    laughter of friends.

    I stole away
    and waited here,
    ready to be grateful
    for your prattle,
    willing to be wowed
    and awed, an audience
    for your recitals,
    the author of your being,
    creator of an earthly star.

    Did Dai ever finish this? Anyone want to tackle it?

    It is finished. Notice how the final two words repeat (with a slight alteration) the title.

    Poetically, it better than

    Childish name-calling from Harry Lime noted and removed

    HTH and HAND.

    Touchy today

    Not really.
    --
    Poetry and songs of Will Dockery:
    https://www.reverbnation.com/willdockery
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